You have given a good physical description of Bobby but I think there is a lot more to Bobby's character than what you have written here. What about his personality? Some alliteration and some more interesting words would have made your character description a lot more richer. Keep that in mind for next time. Keep trying Hadley.
You have given a good physical description of Bobby but I think there is a lot more to Bobby's character than what you have written here. What about his personality? Some alliteration and some more interesting words would have made your character description a lot more richer. Keep that in mind for next time. Keep trying Hadley.
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